Receiving feedback on something we’ve put our heart, sweat and tears into can taste bittersweet. I mentioned in my last post that I’d submitted my latest short story, “Blurred Lines”, to Writer’s Digest 2nd Critique Service and it’s back.
In case you aren’t familiar with this service, you submit pages of your short story or manuscript for professional feedback. It’s a very reasonable rate and there are a few different areas you can choose from. One is where you receive feedback on plot, character etc. and the other is straight up editing including all those lovely bits of grammar that tend to drive us up the wall. Gloria Kempton reviewed mine on plot, characterization, conflict, suspense, dialogue and other points. You should check out her credentials by the way. Writer’s Digest doesn’t play around, which is why I continue to use them.
I’ll share a bit of Gloria’s feedback with you:
“You’re a skilled storyteller when it comes to the fiction elements of dialogue and setting and character development. Your setting details are sensory and authentic; whenever you take us into a new scene, you create a new setting that surrounds us so that we feel like we’re a part of it. Your dialogue sparkles and is animated so as to keep each scene alive at each moment.
What’s really working is the story’s voice. We believe this character, that she could be the kid next door. You’ve got the voice down for young adult novel. The first-person voice brings the reader in close to Lexi so that she feels committed to following her wherever she goes. And clearly, this is Lexi’s story, no one else’s, so you don’t need any of the other characters’ viewpoints, anyway.
The pacing is working well—there’s always something going on, and yet, you give the reader breaks in between the dramatic incidents where Lexi can consider her next course of action. There’s lots of tension and suspense in each scene. The story has a smooth flow to it, one scene building on the one before and leading up to the next.”
I have to say that I”m still processing. I’m pretty excited, but there’s more…my mistakes that I need to fix. With every story I write and submit it’s a learning process. So, I’m off to work on those areas. Lexi (my protagonist) and I are meeting for lunch to chat. 🙂 She says to tell everyone hi, and she’ll see you soon.
Until Next Time…